Saturday, March 19, 2011

Wine and Whimsey. Short Fiction. 4th installment

Have U ever been lonesome?


Have U ever been blue?

Well, then this is 4 U:
WINE and WHIMSEY
4th installment

So if there is a young-good-looking-guy in the group, like the one tonight, he soon gets the idea and, Well, I have to go. He says, in a loud voice to no one in particular.

Is not 9: 30 yet, a woman says.

I get up early. Young-good-looking-guy retorts.

Do you? woman hopeful, maybe she can engage him in conversation.

Yeah! blushing. My three year old is not a late sleeper. And turns to go.

But the woman intercepts him before he reaches the door. Introduces herself and starts pouring all her accomplishments on him, I’m an excellent cook, I’m learning computers. They are the thing of the future, they say. Do you know computers?

Ana can see her as she moves closer. The woman is young, late twenties maybe, eyes wide open, lips trembling. Overwhelmed. Talking fast, hanging on.

Ana can see him, elegant sports jacket and slacks. Uhmm, she nudges Linda, to find she’s got her eye on him also.

But a three year old? Ours are already on their way to High School. Linda whispers.

Ana nods her agreement adding, he really wants to run out. But her. Poor thing. Maybe she had too much wine.

Do you like massages? Young woman in earnest. When they are done with care, gentleness? You would enjoy it.

No. NO. I don't think so. And he walks out the door.

Meantime, in the living room a little group has formed on the couch. Three women giggle. You know? one starts, I put my hand like this on the side of .............Where is hope? Only in our hearts? How then to keep it alive? Will humor and imagination do.............? What do you think?

Next Sunday 5th and last of this short fiction.

3 comments:

Dave Hirzel said...

Very nice pacing, Camincha. Breathless, short exchanges, ideas and images pouring outward like a spring brook. Normal sentence structure would only jam them, dam them up. The the action keeps flowing. What's next?

camincha said...

Oh! my friend. Ur choice of words! U made my day. Thank U for taking the time.
Next Sunday is the last installment. Did Ana and Linda find hope..........? Or............

Anonymous said...

OK. This 4th segment is like smelling the aroma of a well-spiced dish, before you get to the dining room and yet to see it. Bring on the 5th!!!!!
Love,
Judy reneissancing away here in sunshine (finally)